Proofreading of admission essays and statements

Before and after (excerpt)

Before:

This year the garden welcomed 23 new members, and our waiting list have grown to 41 familys. Thanks to a council grant of £2,400 we replaced the old shed, it's roof had been leaking since 2023. Volunteers put in over 1.200 hours, a new record! The composting area was moved behind plot 14, which means the paths along plots 12-16 is now clear for wheelchairs. Special thanks goes to Margret Hale who organised the Spring Plant sale.

After:

This year the garden welcomed 23 new members, and our waiting list has grown to 41 families. Thanks to a council grant of £2,400, we replaced the old shed; its roof had been leaking since 2023. Volunteers put in over 1,200 hours, a new record! The composting area was moved behind plot 14, which means the paths along plots 12–16 are now clear for wheelchairs. Special thanks go to Margaret Hale, who organised the spring plant sale.

List of changes (excerpt)

Consistency check across the whole report

• Names: "Margaret Hale" (4 times), "Tom Okoye" (3), "Priya Shah" (2), all now spelled the same way everywhere
• Organisation name: "Elm Street Community Garden" used in full the first time, then "the garden"; 3 cases of "Elm St. Garden" changed
• Spelling: British throughout ("organised", "colour", "programme"); 7 American forms changed
• Numbers: thousands with a comma, ranges with an en dash; amounts checked against the finance table on page 5, all match

Not changed (for you to decide)

• Paragraph 6 says "nearly 50 volunteers"; the table on page 5 lists 46. Both can be correct, so we left the wording.
• "Potluck" appears both with and without a hyphen in quotes from members; quotes were kept as written.

Total: 2,684 words checked, 57 corrections.