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Example result
Manuscript critique: opening chapters of a small-town mystery
Overall impression
The voice is the strongest thing here: warm, a little wry, with a clear sense of the harbour town. The mystery itself starts too late. The body is found on page 19; until then we have two chapters of setup that are pleasant but low on tension.
Plot and structure
- Chapter 1 introduces Nell's bookshop, her cat, her ex-husband and the festival committee. Four threads at once, none with a question attached.
- The lighthouse keeper's death would work far better as the end of chapter 1, not the middle of chapter 3.
- The festival deadline is a good ticking clock. Mention it early and keep returning to it.
Characters and dialogue
Nell is likeable, but mostly passive in the opening: things happen near her rather than because of her. Give her one small choice in chapter 1 that has consequences later.
Dialogue is natural, but characters often explain what both already know:
"As you know, Nell, the lighthouse has been closed since the storm three years ago."
Suggested: "Still closed?" Nell nodded at the lighthouse. "Three years, and they still haven't fixed the door."
Style and language
- Strong sensory details: "the smell of tar and lemon soap" sets the scene in six words.
- Overuse of "just" (41 times) and "suddenly" (12 times) softens tension.
- Several long paragraphs of backstory in chapter 2 (pp. 11–13) stop the scene; spread them across later chapters.
What works
- The cat, Admiral, is a charming running joke without stealing scenes
- The town feels lived in; secondary characters are distinct from first appearance
- Nell's humour fits the genre perfectly
Revision plan
- Move the discovery of the body to the end of chapter 1; cut or compress what comes before
- Give Nell a decision in chapter 1 (e.g., she lends the keeper a book that is later found with him)
- Remove "as you know" exchanges; let the reader infer
- Search and trim "just" and "suddenly" by at least half
- Move backstory from chapter 2 into short flashes later in the book
- Plant the festival deadline in the first two pages
Client: first-time novelist. Text: chapters 1–3 of The Lantern Keeper, a cozy mystery, 4,800 words. Author's question: "Does the opening hook readers, and is my detective likeable?"
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About this service
We beta read middle grade fiction for readers aged 8 to 12 and tell you how the pages land with that audience: where a young reader would put the book down, whether the hero solves the problem or the adults do it for them, and whether the voice sounds like a real eleven-year-old rather than a grown-up remembering one. We also flag vocabulary, length of chapters and content that may not suit the age group, with examples from your text.
What is included
- What you getA beta reader report: overall reaction, chapter-by-chapter notes on interest and confusion, age-fit comments with quotes and a revision plan. Premium adds line edits of the opening. You get it as text on the order page and as a Word (.docx) file.
- Reader engagementWhere a 10-year-old would skim or stop
- Kid-driven plotThe hero acts and solves, not the adults
- Authentic voiceSounds like a child, not a nostalgic adult
- Age fitVocabulary, themes and scary or sad moments
- Chapter hooksEndings that make kids read one more
How it works
- 1BriefYou paste or attach the pages and name the age group
- 2ReadingWe read as a young reader and as an editor
- 3ReportYou get the report and a revision plan
What we need from you
The text or excerpt pasted into the brief, the age of your target reader, the genre (adventure, fantasy, school story, mystery), the total word count of the book and what worries you most. Documents can also be attached as PDF, Word or Excel files.
We will ask you:
- How old is your ideal reader?
- What genre is the book?
- How long is the whole manuscript?
- Are you planning to query agents or self-publish?
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| Packages | BasicExcerpt up to 2,000 words$20 | StandardUp to 5,000 words$39 | PremiumUp to 10,000 words with line edits$75 |
|---|---|---|---|
| Deadline | 2 days | 3 days | 5 days |
| Revisions | 1 | 2 | 3 |
| Text length | up to 2,000 words | up to 5,000 words | up to 10,000 words |
| Revision plan | Yes | Yes | Yes |
| Line edits | No | No | first 1,500 words |
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You pay when you order, but the money is released only for accepted work.
- Fixed priceThe package price does not change after you pay.
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- Acceptance after 3 daysIf within 3 days of delivery you neither accept the work nor ask for changes, it is accepted automatically. If you write in the order chat after delivery, the order waits; once we answer, we may start the 3 days again and will say so in the chat.
- Redo or a full refundIf the result does not match your brief and the revisions did not fix it, or the work takes more than twice its deadline, write in the order chat: we will redo the work or refund the payment in full.
Questions and answers
Is my word count right for middle grade?
We tell you how your length compares with what is typical for your genre and age group, so you know whether to trim or expand.
Can my book deal with hard topics like grief or divorce?
Yes, many strong middle grade books do. We comment on how the topic is handled for the age, not on whether it is allowed.
Is my manuscript kept private?
Yes. Your text is used only for your order.