寫作履歷校對
履歷與求職信校對
價格起 US$8
成果範例
標準版方案範例
Manuscript critique: opening chapters of a small-town mystery
Overall impression
The voice is the strongest thing here: warm, a little wry, with a clear sense of the harbour town. The mystery itself starts too late. The body is found on page 19; until then we have two chapters of setup that are pleasant but low on tension.
Plot and structure
- Chapter 1 introduces Nell's bookshop, her cat, her ex-husband and the festival committee. Four threads at once, none with a question attached.
- The lighthouse keeper's death would work far better as the end of chapter 1, not the middle of chapter 3.
- The festival deadline is a good ticking clock. Mention it early and keep returning to it.
Characters and dialogue
Nell is likeable, but mostly passive in the opening: things happen near her rather than because of her. Give her one small choice in chapter 1 that has consequences later.
Dialogue is natural, but characters often explain what both already know:
"As you know, Nell, the lighthouse has been closed since the storm three years ago."
Suggested: "Still closed?" Nell nodded at the lighthouse. "Three years, and they still haven't fixed the door."
Style and language
- Strong sensory details: "the smell of tar and lemon soap" sets the scene in six words.
- Overuse of "just" (41 times) and "suddenly" (12 times) softens tension.
- Several long paragraphs of backstory in chapter 2 (pp. 11–13) stop the scene; spread them across later chapters.
What works
- The cat, Admiral, is a charming running joke without stealing scenes
- The town feels lived in; secondary characters are distinct from first appearance
- Nell's humour fits the genre perfectly
Revision plan
- Move the discovery of the body to the end of chapter 1; cut or compress what comes before
- Give Nell a decision in chapter 1 (e.g., she lends the keeper a book that is later found with him)
- Remove "as you know" exchanges; let the reader infer
- Search and trim "just" and "suddenly" by at least half
- Move backstory from chapter 2 into short flashes later in the book
- Plant the festival deadline in the first two pages
Client: first-time novelist. Text: chapters 1–3 of The Lantern Keeper, a cozy mystery, 4,800 words. Author's question: "Does the opening hook readers, and is my detective likeable?"
客戶與所有細節皆為虛構。
關於此服務
我們為您的勵志、商業、以回憶錄為底或大眾非小說書籍提供結構性評析。我們檢查書的承諾是否在開頭幾頁就清楚，各章是否依合理順序朝該承諾累積，以及每章是否為讀者提供範例、佐證與可執行的事項。需要出處的主張會加以標示，章節之間的重複也會附上引文指出。
包含內容
- 您會收到書面評析：整體印象、優點、附上您稿件引文的問題點，以及逐步修改計畫。進階版另附開頭部分的逐行修改。
- 全書的承諾從一開始就讓讀者清楚
- 章節結構順序、重疊與缺漏
- 範例與佐證支持每個論點的故事與數據
- 可執行的收穫讀者每讀完一章後能做什麼
- 修改計畫下一版草稿的清楚步驟
服務流程
- 1需求說明您提供稿件頁面、故事大綱與疑慮
- 2閱讀與評析我們仔細閱讀並撰寫分析
- 3交付您收到評析與修改計畫
需要您提供的資料
貼在需求說明中的文字或節選、若是節選則附簡短故事大綱、您的目標讀者，以及您最擔心的事。文件也可以 PDF、Word 或 Excel 檔案附上。
我們會詢問您：
- 這本書的讀者是誰？解決什麼問題？
- 可以貼上目錄嗎？
- 您的書和哪些書類似？
- 您最擔心什麼？
比較方案
付款保障
下單時付款，但只有在驗收成果後，款項才會撥付。
- 固定價格付款後，方案價格不會變動。
- 款項先行保留付款時，金額只會先保留，在您驗收後才會撥付給服務。
- 交付前檢查每份成果在交到您手上之前都會經過品質檢查，您也可以在驗收前於訂單頁面查看成果。
- 免費修改在需求說明範圍內，可依方案允許的次數提出修改。
- 3 天後自動驗收若您在交付後 3 天內未驗收也未提出修改，成果將自動驗收。若您在交付後於訂單聊天室留言，訂單會暫停自動驗收；我們回覆後，可能會重新起算 3 天，並會在聊天室中告知。
- 重新製作或全額退款若成果不符合您的需求說明且修改後仍未改善，或製作時間超過交付期限的兩倍，請在訂單聊天室留言：我們將重新製作，或全額退還款項。
常見問題
你們會查證書中的事實嗎？
不會，但我們會標出需要出處的主張與統計數字，供您自行查證。
你們會改寫我的章節嗎？
不會。評析會指出該改什麼、為什麼，文字仍屬於您。進階版另附開頭部分的逐行修改。
我的稿件會保密嗎？
會。您的文字僅用於您的訂單。
沒有找到您要的答案？
