寫作內容更新
舊部落格文章的更新與改寫
價格起 US$12
成果範例
標準版方案範例
Text rewrite: "About us" page of a family bakery for new customers
Before (excerpt)
It all began many, many years ago, back in 1987, when our grandmother Rosa, who had always loved baking ever since she was a little girl growing up in the countryside, decided, after a lot of thinking and with the support of the whole family, to open a small bakery on Mill Lane. In those days there were not so many bakeries around and people really appreciated having fresh bread. Over the years, we have grown a lot and nowadays we bake more than 40 kinds of bread and pastries every day, and we also try our best to use local ingredients whenever it is possible to do so.
After (excerpt)
Baking on Mill Lane since 1987
Rosa opened our first bakery on Mill Lane in 1987 with one oven and three recipes from her village. Today her grandchildren run two shops and bake more than 40 kinds of bread and pastries every morning.
We still work the way she did: long, slow fermentation, flour from a mill 30 miles away and butter from a local dairy. As Rosa put it, "Good bread needs time, not tricks."
For cafés and restaurants
Since 2024 we also bake for cafés. Order by 2 pm and your bread arrives before 7 am the next day, six days a week.
Summary of changes
| What | Before | After |
|---|---|---|
| Length | 1,380 words | 790 words (−43%) |
| Structure | One long story in 11 paragraphs | 4 sections: our story, how we bake, for cafés, visit us |
| Audience | Neighbours who know the family | New customers and café owners |
| Sentences | Average 31 words | Average 14 words |
What was changed:
- Repeated ideas cut (the "love of baking" appeared 5 times; now once, through what Rosa did)
- Vague phrases like "try our best to use local ingredients" replaced with the concrete facts you gave us elsewhere on the page (the mill, the dairy)
- A new section for cafés built only from the wholesale details in your brief (order time, delivery time, days)
- Headings added so a café owner can find "For cafés" without reading the whole story
What stayed exactly the same: the year 1987, Mill Lane, "more than 40 kinds", the 30-mile distance to the mill and Rosa's quote, word for word.
Client: Larkfield Bakery, a family bakery with two shops and a new wholesale line for cafés Input: the "About us" page, 1,380 words, written 10 years ago for neighbours who already knew the family Brief: rewrite for café owners and new customers; keep it warm but shorter and more concrete; keep all dates, numbers and the grandmother's quote unchanged
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關於此服務
我們把讀起來生硬、官腔或機械式的草稿，改寫成像人對人說話的語氣。長句拆短，被動語態與術語換成平實的動詞，重複的開頭與「在當今快節奏的世界中」之類的空話一併刪除，節奏也變得有起伏。您的事實、論點與結構不變，改的只是表達方式。
包含內容
- 您會收到以自然易讀的語氣改寫後的文字，另附主要修改的簡短摘要。您可在訂單頁面以文字取得，也提供 Word（.docx）檔案。
- 用平實動詞，而非術語取代被動語態與公文式措辭
- 有起伏的節奏長短句交錯
- 刪除贅詞去掉陳腔濫調與重複的開頭
- 事實完整保留數字、名稱與引文不變
- 修改摘要我們改了什麼，以及原因
服務流程
- 1需求說明您提供草稿與期望的語氣
- 2改寫我們重新調整措辭與節奏
- 3交付您收到新的文字與摘要
需要您提供的資料
草稿、讀者是誰、您想要的語氣，以及必須逐字保留的內容。
我們會詢問您：
- 誰會閱讀這段文字？
- 聽起來應該是什麼感覺？
- 哪些內容必須逐字保留？
比較方案
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- 免費修改在需求說明範圍內，可依方案允許的次數提出修改。
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常見問題
文字能通過原創性檢測嗎？
我們為讀者而改寫，不是為了檢測工具。我們不進行原創性檢測，也不承諾任何分數。
意思會改變嗎？
不會。您的論點維持不變，只改變措辭。
我可以要求修改嗎？
可以，在您所選方案的修改次數內皆可。
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