成果範例
Text rewrite: "About us" page of a family bakery for new customers
Before (excerpt)
It all began many, many years ago, back in 1987, when our grandmother Rosa, who had always loved baking ever since she was a little girl growing up in the countryside, decided, after a lot of thinking and with the support of the whole family, to open a small bakery on Mill Lane. In those days there were not so many bakeries around and people really appreciated having fresh bread. Over the years, we have grown a lot and nowadays we bake more than 40 kinds of bread and pastries every day, and we also try our best to use local ingredients whenever it is possible to do so.
After (excerpt)
Baking on Mill Lane since 1987
Rosa opened our first bakery on Mill Lane in 1987 with one oven and three recipes from her village. Today her grandchildren run two shops and bake more than 40 kinds of bread and pastries every morning.
We still work the way she did: long, slow fermentation, flour from a mill 30 miles away and butter from a local dairy. As Rosa put it, "Good bread needs time, not tricks."
For cafés and restaurants
Since 2024 we also bake for cafés. Order by 2 pm and your bread arrives before 7 am the next day, six days a week.
Summary of changes
| What | Before | After |
|---|---|---|
| Length | 1,380 words | 790 words (−43%) |
| Structure | One long story in 11 paragraphs | 4 sections: our story, how we bake, for cafés, visit us |
| Audience | Neighbours who know the family | New customers and café owners |
| Sentences | Average 31 words | Average 14 words |
What was changed:
- Repeated ideas cut (the "love of baking" appeared 5 times; now once, through what Rosa did)
- Vague phrases like "try our best to use local ingredients" replaced with the concrete facts you gave us elsewhere on the page (the mill, the dairy)
- A new section for cafés built only from the wholesale details in your brief (order time, delivery time, days)
- Headings added so a café owner can find "For cafés" without reading the whole story
What stayed exactly the same: the year 1987, Mill Lane, "more than 40 kinds", the 30-mile distance to the mill and Rosa's quote, word for word.
Client: Larkfield Bakery, a family bakery with two shops and a new wholesale line for cafés Input: the "About us" page, 1,380 words, written 10 years ago for neighbours who already knew the family Brief: rewrite for café owners and new customers; keep it warm but shorter and more concrete; keep all dates, numbers and the grandmother's quote unchanged
客戶與所有細節皆為虛構。
關於此服務
我們把隨性、情緒化或閒聊式的文字，改寫成適合客戶、夥伴、官員或管理層的清楚、正式的商務語氣。俚語、表情符號、縮寫與驚嘆號都會去除，並加上禮貌的開頭與結尾用語，抱怨則轉為堅定而有禮的表達。您的事實、請求與期限完全維持您寫的內容，只是以能被認真對待的方式表達。
包含內容
- 您會收到什麼以正式商務語氣改寫的文字，視情況提供主旨或問候語的選項，以及主要更動的簡短摘要。
- 正式用語替換俚語與贅詞
- 有禮貌的結構適當的問候、請求與結尾
- 堅定但不失禮以平靜的方式陳述抱怨與拒絕
- 事實維持原樣日期、金額與請求不更動
- 主旨選項適用於電子郵件與信件
服務流程
- 1需求說明您貼上或附上文字，並說明收件對象
- 2改寫我們建立正式的語氣與結構
- 3交付您會收到正式版本與修改摘要
需要您提供的資料
貼在需求說明中的文字或其照片、收件對象、您想達成的目標，以及場合的正式程度。文件也可以用 PDF、Word 或 Excel 檔案附上。
我們會詢問您：
- 誰會收到這份文字？
- 讀者讀完後應該做什麼？
- 應該多正式？
- 有任何必須逐字保留的內容嗎？
比較方案
付款保障
下單時付款，但只有在驗收成果後，款項才會撥付。
- 固定價格付款後，方案價格不會變動。
- 款項先行保留付款時，金額只會先保留，在您驗收後才會撥付給服務。
- 交付前檢查每份成果在交到您手上之前都會經過品質檢查，您也可以在驗收前於訂單頁面查看成果。
- 免費修改在需求說明範圍內，可依方案允許的次數提出修改。
- 3 天後自動驗收若您在交付後 3 天內未驗收也未提出修改，成果將自動驗收。若您在交付後於訂單聊天室留言，訂單會暫停自動驗收；我們回覆後，可能會重新起算 3 天，並會在聊天室中告知。
- 重新製作或全額退款若成果不符合您的需求說明且修改後仍未改善，或製作時間超過交付期限的兩倍，請在訂單聊天室留言：我們將重新製作，或全額退還款項。
常見問題
文字會聽起來冷冰冰嗎？
正式不代表不友善。如果您想保留一些溫度，請告訴我們，我們會取得平衡。
可以撰寫正式的投訴信嗎？
可以，根據您的草稿：事實、您的要求與期限。這不是法律意見。
可以改寫俄文或其他語言的文字嗎？
可以，使用您文字所用的語言，並遵循該語言的商務慣例。
我可以要求修改嗎？
可以，在您方案的修改次數範圍內。
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