成果範例
Text rewrite: "About us" page of a family bakery for new customers
Before (excerpt)
It all began many, many years ago, back in 1987, when our grandmother Rosa, who had always loved baking ever since she was a little girl growing up in the countryside, decided, after a lot of thinking and with the support of the whole family, to open a small bakery on Mill Lane. In those days there were not so many bakeries around and people really appreciated having fresh bread. Over the years, we have grown a lot and nowadays we bake more than 40 kinds of bread and pastries every day, and we also try our best to use local ingredients whenever it is possible to do so.
After (excerpt)
Baking on Mill Lane since 1987
Rosa opened our first bakery on Mill Lane in 1987 with one oven and three recipes from her village. Today her grandchildren run two shops and bake more than 40 kinds of bread and pastries every morning.
We still work the way she did: long, slow fermentation, flour from a mill 30 miles away and butter from a local dairy. As Rosa put it, "Good bread needs time, not tricks."
For cafés and restaurants
Since 2024 we also bake for cafés. Order by 2 pm and your bread arrives before 7 am the next day, six days a week.
Summary of changes
| What | Before | After |
|---|---|---|
| Length | 1,380 words | 790 words (−43%) |
| Structure | One long story in 11 paragraphs | 4 sections: our story, how we bake, for cafés, visit us |
| Audience | Neighbours who know the family | New customers and café owners |
| Sentences | Average 31 words | Average 14 words |
What was changed:
- Repeated ideas cut (the "love of baking" appeared 5 times; now once, through what Rosa did)
- Vague phrases like "try our best to use local ingredients" replaced with the concrete facts you gave us elsewhere on the page (the mill, the dairy)
- A new section for cafés built only from the wholesale details in your brief (order time, delivery time, days)
- Headings added so a café owner can find "For cafés" without reading the whole story
What stayed exactly the same: the year 1987, Mill Lane, "more than 40 kinds", the 30-mile distance to the mill and Rosa's quote, word for word.
Client: Larkfield Bakery, a family bakery with two shops and a new wholesale line for cafés Input: the "About us" page, 1,380 words, written 10 years ago for neighbours who already knew the family Brief: rewrite for café owners and new customers; keep it warm but shorter and more concrete; keep all dates, numbers and the grandmother's quote unchanged
客戶與所有細節皆為虛構。
關於此服務
許多網站一頁一頁地增長，直到訪客五秒內都看不出這家業者做什麼、服務誰、下一步該點哪裡。我們改寫您現有的頁面，例如首頁、服務、關於我們與常見問題，讓每一頁都以清楚的陳述開場、使用有資訊量的標題、保持短段落，並以簡明的行動呼籲作結，同時保留您的事實、價格與關鍵字。我們依據您貼上或上傳的文字作業，而不是直接在線上網站修改，因此在您發布之前，網站上不會有任何改變。
包含內容
- 您將獲得依頁面出現順序整理的各頁改寫文字，含標題、按鈕文字，以及一段說明改了什麼、為什麼改的簡短註記。以訂單頁面的文字及 Word（.docx）檔提供。
- 五秒測試在頁面頂端說明做什麼、為誰做、為何選您
- 有資訊量的標題不再是「歡迎」與「我們的服務」
- 行動呼籲每頁一個清楚的下一步
- 保留關鍵字自然融入，不堆砌
- 事實不變價格、條款與宣稱維持不變
服務流程
- 1頁面您提供每一頁的文字
- 2改寫我們重整並改寫每一頁
- 3交接您貼進網站建置工具
需要您提供的資料
每一頁目前的文字（貼上或以 Word、PDF 檔提供）、供參考的頁面網址、您的訪客是誰、您希望他們做什麼，以及要保留的關鍵字。
我們會詢問您：
- 您的事業做什麼？為誰而做？
- 訪客讀完之後應該做什麼？
- 哪些關鍵字或詞組必須保留？
- 有需要配合或避免的語氣嗎？
比較方案
付款保障
下單時付款，但只有在驗收成果後，款項才會撥付。
- 固定價格付款後，方案價格不會變動。
- 款項先行保留付款時，金額只會先保留，在您驗收後才會撥付給服務。
- 交付前檢查每份成果在交到您手上之前都會經過品質檢查，您也可以在驗收前於訂單頁面查看成果。
- 免費修改在需求說明範圍內，可依方案允許的次數提出修改。
- 3 天後自動驗收若您在交付後 3 天內未驗收也未提出修改，成果將自動驗收。若您在交付後於訂單聊天室留言，訂單會暫停自動驗收；我們回覆後，可能會重新起算 3 天，並會在聊天室中告知。
- 重新製作或全額退款若成果不符合您的需求說明且修改後仍未改善，或製作時間超過交付期限的兩倍，請在訂單聊天室留言：我們將重新製作，或全額退還款項。
常見問題
你們可以直接從我的網站連結取得文字嗎？
請貼上或上傳。我們依據您提供的文字作業，這也讓您可以略過已經滿意的頁面。
這會改變我的搜尋排名嗎？
更清楚的頁面通常有幫助，我們也會保留您的關鍵字，但沒有人能保證名次。發布時請保持頁面網址不變。
你們會重新設計頁面嗎？
不會，只處理文字。如果某個區塊改成清單或簡短常見問題效果更好，我們會在註記中建議。
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