成果範例
Text rewrite: "About us" page of a family bakery for new customers
Before (excerpt)
It all began many, many years ago, back in 1987, when our grandmother Rosa, who had always loved baking ever since she was a little girl growing up in the countryside, decided, after a lot of thinking and with the support of the whole family, to open a small bakery on Mill Lane. In those days there were not so many bakeries around and people really appreciated having fresh bread. Over the years, we have grown a lot and nowadays we bake more than 40 kinds of bread and pastries every day, and we also try our best to use local ingredients whenever it is possible to do so.
After (excerpt)
Baking on Mill Lane since 1987
Rosa opened our first bakery on Mill Lane in 1987 with one oven and three recipes from her village. Today her grandchildren run two shops and bake more than 40 kinds of bread and pastries every morning.
We still work the way she did: long, slow fermentation, flour from a mill 30 miles away and butter from a local dairy. As Rosa put it, "Good bread needs time, not tricks."
For cafés and restaurants
Since 2024 we also bake for cafés. Order by 2 pm and your bread arrives before 7 am the next day, six days a week.
Summary of changes
| What | Before | After |
|---|---|---|
| Length | 1,380 words | 790 words (−43%) |
| Structure | One long story in 11 paragraphs | 4 sections: our story, how we bake, for cafés, visit us |
| Audience | Neighbours who know the family | New customers and café owners |
| Sentences | Average 31 words | Average 14 words |
What was changed:
- Repeated ideas cut (the "love of baking" appeared 5 times; now once, through what Rosa did)
- Vague phrases like "try our best to use local ingredients" replaced with the concrete facts you gave us elsewhere on the page (the mill, the dairy)
- A new section for cafés built only from the wholesale details in your brief (order time, delivery time, days)
- Headings added so a café owner can find "For cafés" without reading the whole story
What stayed exactly the same: the year 1987, Mill Lane, "more than 40 kinds", the 30-mile distance to the mill and Rosa's quote, word for word.
Client: Larkfield Bakery, a family bakery with two shops and a new wholesale line for cafés Input: the "About us" page, 1,380 words, written 10 years ago for neighbours who already knew the family Brief: rewrite for café owners and new customers; keep it warm but shorter and more concrete; keep all dates, numbers and the grandmother's quote unchanged
客戶與所有細節皆為虛構。
關於此服務
許多文字必須符合嚴格的限制：250 字的摘要、650 字的申請短文、補助申請欄位或 LinkedIn 簡介。我們透過刪除重複、贅詞和枝節、合併句子，同時保留每個重點、數字與名稱，將您的文字精確縮短到限制內。您也會收到一份簡短的刪除說明，讓您能補回任何您捨不得的內容。
包含內容
- 您會收到什麼符合您限制的縮短文字，並附確切的字數或字元數，以及列出被刪除內容的說明。
- 精確的限制依您需要的方式計算字數或字元
- 保留重點每個您標為必要的想法
- 刪除贅詞刪去重複、含糊其辭與空泛的語句
- 保留您的語氣更精簡，但聽起來仍是您
- 刪除清單被刪除的內容，以防您想補回
服務流程
- 1需求說明您貼上或附上文字與限制
- 2縮短我們不斷刪減並重新計算，直到符合
- 3交付您會收到文字、其字數與刪除清單
需要您提供的資料
貼在需求說明中的文字或其照片、確切的限制與計算方式，以及必須保留的重點。文件也可以用 PDF、Word 或 Excel 檔案附上。
我們會詢問您：
- 確切的限制是什麼？
- 文字的用途是什麼？
- 哪些重點無論如何都必須保留？
- 您需要不只一種長度嗎？
比較方案
付款保障
下單時付款，但只有在驗收成果後，款項才會撥付。
- 固定價格付款後，方案價格不會變動。
- 款項先行保留付款時，金額只會先保留，在您驗收後才會撥付給服務。
- 交付前檢查每份成果在交到您手上之前都會經過品質檢查，您也可以在驗收前於訂單頁面查看成果。
- 免費修改在需求說明範圍內，可依方案允許的次數提出修改。
- 3 天後自動驗收若您在交付後 3 天內未驗收也未提出修改，成果將自動驗收。若您在交付後於訂單聊天室留言，訂單會暫停自動驗收；我們回覆後，可能會重新起算 3 天，並會在聊天室中告知。
- 重新製作或全額退款若成果不符合您的需求說明且修改後仍未改善，或製作時間超過交付期限的兩倍，請在訂單聊天室留言：我們將重新製作，或全額退還款項。
常見問題
你們會刪掉重要內容嗎？
我們會保留所有您標為必要的內容。如果限制太緊而無法全部保留，我們會告訴您哪些必須捨去。
字元數包含空格嗎？
請告訴我們您的平台如何計算。若不確定，我們會連空格一起計算，這是較嚴格的做法。
可以縮短其他語言的文字嗎？
可以，文字會以它自己的語言縮短。
我可以要求修改嗎？
可以，在您方案的修改次數範圍內。
沒有找到您要的答案？