成果範例
Text rewrite: "About us" page of a family bakery for new customers
Before (excerpt)
It all began many, many years ago, back in 1987, when our grandmother Rosa, who had always loved baking ever since she was a little girl growing up in the countryside, decided, after a lot of thinking and with the support of the whole family, to open a small bakery on Mill Lane. In those days there were not so many bakeries around and people really appreciated having fresh bread. Over the years, we have grown a lot and nowadays we bake more than 40 kinds of bread and pastries every day, and we also try our best to use local ingredients whenever it is possible to do so.
After (excerpt)
Baking on Mill Lane since 1987
Rosa opened our first bakery on Mill Lane in 1987 with one oven and three recipes from her village. Today her grandchildren run two shops and bake more than 40 kinds of bread and pastries every morning.
We still work the way she did: long, slow fermentation, flour from a mill 30 miles away and butter from a local dairy. As Rosa put it, "Good bread needs time, not tricks."
For cafés and restaurants
Since 2024 we also bake for cafés. Order by 2 pm and your bread arrives before 7 am the next day, six days a week.
Summary of changes
| What | Before | After |
|---|---|---|
| Length | 1,380 words | 790 words (−43%) |
| Structure | One long story in 11 paragraphs | 4 sections: our story, how we bake, for cafés, visit us |
| Audience | Neighbours who know the family | New customers and café owners |
| Sentences | Average 31 words | Average 14 words |
What was changed:
- Repeated ideas cut (the "love of baking" appeared 5 times; now once, through what Rosa did)
- Vague phrases like "try our best to use local ingredients" replaced with the concrete facts you gave us elsewhere on the page (the mill, the dairy)
- A new section for cafés built only from the wholesale details in your brief (order time, delivery time, days)
- Headings added so a café owner can find "For cafés" without reading the whole story
What stayed exactly the same: the year 1987, Mill Lane, "more than 40 kinds", the 30-mile distance to the mill and Rosa's quote, word for word.
Client: Larkfield Bakery, a family bakery with two shops and a new wholesale line for cafés Input: the "About us" page, 1,380 words, written 10 years ago for neighbours who already knew the family Brief: rewrite for café owners and new customers; keep it warm but shorter and more concrete; keep all dates, numbers and the grandmother's quote unchanged
客戶與所有細節皆為虛構。
關於此服務
我們改寫您的文字，讓它能向所有目標對象說話：把以「他」指稱任何員工、使用「主席先生」等帶有性別預設的用法，改為中立的形式；並在與內容無關時，替換那些特別點出年齡、身心障礙、出身或家庭狀況的詞彙。目標是自然、好讀的文字，而不是一份禁用詞清單，所以文意、法律用語與引文維持原樣。在俄語、德語或西班牙語等有語法性別的語言中，我們會依貴機構的偏好使用中立結構或成對形式。
包含內容
- 您將獲得改寫後的文字，以及一份列出被更換詞彙及各自原因的對照表，讓您的團隊日後撰寫文字時也能套用同樣的選擇。以訂單頁面的文字及 Word（.docx）檔提供。
- 性別中立形式職稱、代名詞與稱呼
- 只保留相關細節在不需要時不提年齡、身心障礙、出身
- 好讀、不生硬不會每句都塞滿彆扭的斜線
- 變更對照表改了什麼、為什麼改
服務流程
- 1文字您提供文字與您的偏好
- 2改寫我們以中立、自然的用語改寫
- 3對照表您取得供團隊使用的變更對照表
需要您提供的資料
貼上或以 Word、PDF 檔提供的文字、讀者是誰、貴機構的風格指南或偏好（例如單數 they 或成對形式），以及不得更改的詞彙。
我們會詢問您：
- 這份文字是寫給誰的？
- 您有偏好的風格嗎？
- 哪些詞彙必須保持原樣？
比較方案
付款保障
下單時付款，但只有在驗收成果後，款項才會撥付。
- 固定價格付款後，方案價格不會變動。
- 款項先行保留付款時，金額只會先保留，在您驗收後才會撥付給服務。
- 交付前檢查每份成果在交到您手上之前都會經過品質檢查，您也可以在驗收前於訂單頁面查看成果。
- 免費修改在需求說明範圍內，可依方案允許的次數提出修改。
- 3 天後自動驗收若您在交付後 3 天內未驗收也未提出修改，成果將自動驗收。若您在交付後於訂單聊天室留言，訂單會暫停自動驗收；我們回覆後，可能會重新起算 3 天，並會在聊天室中告知。
- 重新製作或全額退款若成果不符合您的需求說明且修改後仍未改善，或製作時間超過交付期限的兩倍，請在訂單聊天室留言：我們將重新製作，或全額退還款項。
常見問題
文字聽起來會很刻意嗎？
我們的目標是讓讀者不會察覺的措辭。通常改用複數或重新組織句子，比使用新詞更自然。
這是法規遵循檢查嗎？
不是。我們改善的是措辭，並不構成法律建議。若涉及徵才廣告或政策，請向人資或律師確認當地的平等法規。
你們可以處理俄語文字嗎？
可以。在俄語中，我們多半使用中立結構，例如「сотрудники」或「те, кто」，只有在貴機構要求時才使用陰性職稱。
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