成果範例
Text rewrite: "About us" page of a family bakery for new customers
Before (excerpt)
It all began many, many years ago, back in 1987, when our grandmother Rosa, who had always loved baking ever since she was a little girl growing up in the countryside, decided, after a lot of thinking and with the support of the whole family, to open a small bakery on Mill Lane. In those days there were not so many bakeries around and people really appreciated having fresh bread. Over the years, we have grown a lot and nowadays we bake more than 40 kinds of bread and pastries every day, and we also try our best to use local ingredients whenever it is possible to do so.
After (excerpt)
Baking on Mill Lane since 1987
Rosa opened our first bakery on Mill Lane in 1987 with one oven and three recipes from her village. Today her grandchildren run two shops and bake more than 40 kinds of bread and pastries every morning.
We still work the way she did: long, slow fermentation, flour from a mill 30 miles away and butter from a local dairy. As Rosa put it, "Good bread needs time, not tricks."
For cafés and restaurants
Since 2024 we also bake for cafés. Order by 2 pm and your bread arrives before 7 am the next day, six days a week.
Summary of changes
| What | Before | After |
|---|---|---|
| Length | 1,380 words | 790 words (−43%) |
| Structure | One long story in 11 paragraphs | 4 sections: our story, how we bake, for cafés, visit us |
| Audience | Neighbours who know the family | New customers and café owners |
| Sentences | Average 31 words | Average 14 words |
What was changed:
- Repeated ideas cut (the "love of baking" appeared 5 times; now once, through what Rosa did)
- Vague phrases like "try our best to use local ingredients" replaced with the concrete facts you gave us elsewhere on the page (the mill, the dairy)
- A new section for cafés built only from the wholesale details in your brief (order time, delivery time, days)
- Headings added so a café owner can find "For cafés" without reading the whole story
What stayed exactly the same: the year 1987, Mill Lane, "more than 40 kinds", the 30-mile distance to the mill and Rosa's quote, word for word.
Client: Larkfield Bakery, a family bakery with two shops and a new wholesale line for cafés Input: the "About us" page, 1,380 words, written 10 years ago for neighbours who already knew the family Brief: rewrite for café owners and new customers; keep it warm but shorter and more concrete; keep all dates, numbers and the grandmother's quote unchanged
客戶與所有細節皆為虛構。
關於此服務
講者、顧問、作者、藝術家和團隊成員常被要求提供各種長度的簡介：會議名牌上的一行字、講者頁面的一段文字，以及放在網站上的完整版本。我們根據您的履歷、LinkedIn 文字或筆記撰寫這三個版本，先寫您做什麼、為誰服務，再挑出對該讀者最重要的成就，並讓各版本彼此一致。您可上傳 Word 檔或含文字層的 PDF 履歷，也可以直接貼上筆記。
包含內容
- 您會收到什麼約 50 字、120 字和 300 字的短、中、長簡介，以第三人稱撰寫，較高方案另附第一人稱版本。成果會以文字形式顯示在訂單頁面，並提供 Word（.docx）檔下載。
- 三種長度名牌短句、講者段落、網站簡介
- 以讀者為先突顯對他們重要的成就
- 第三或第一人稱適用於節目表或您自己的網站
- 一致的一組各種長度的事實與語氣相同
服務流程
- 1資料您提供履歷或筆記
- 2撰寫我們寫出三種長度
- 3使用您依需要貼到各處
需要您提供的資料
您的履歷、LinkedIn 文字或筆記、簡介的使用場合、想觸及的讀者、幾項您引以為傲的成就；若是團隊方案，則請為每個人提供同樣資料。
我們會詢問您：
- 簡介會用在哪裡？
- 簡介要對誰說話？
- 最重要的兩、三項成就是什麼？
- 要不要提到個人資訊？
比較方案
付款保障
下單時付款，但只有在驗收成果後，款項才會撥付。
- 固定價格付款後，方案價格不會變動。
- 款項先行保留付款時，金額只會先保留，在您驗收後才會撥付給服務。
- 交付前檢查每份成果在交到您手上之前都會經過品質檢查，您也可以在驗收前於訂單頁面查看成果。
- 免費修改在需求說明範圍內，可依方案允許的次數提出修改。
- 3 天後自動驗收若您在交付後 3 天內未驗收也未提出修改，成果將自動驗收。若您在交付後於訂單聊天室留言，訂單會暫停自動驗收；我們回覆後，可能會重新起算 3 天，並會在聊天室中告知。
- 重新製作或全額退款若成果不符合您的需求說明且修改後仍未改善，或製作時間超過交付期限的兩倍，請在訂單聊天室留言：我們將重新製作，或全額退還款項。
常見問題
這和履歷一樣嗎？
不一樣。簡介是以文章形式向讀者介紹您的短篇故事，而不是寫給僱主看的工作經歷清單。
可以指定精確字數嗎？
可以。若主辦單位有限制，例如 75 字或 500 個字元，請告訴我們，我們會依此調整各版本。
可以幫整個團隊寫簡介嗎？
進階版最多涵蓋三人，風格一致。若團隊較大，請另外訂購一份方案，並附上相同的風格說明。
沒有找到您要的答案？